Sunday, January 23, 2005
Insert screams of frustration
Title: Spiked Tea, Among Other Things
Fandom: Gundam Wing
Author: Really Bad Eggs
Location: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/405107/1/
Feedback given:
Where to begin with this story...
Your spelling is atrocious, grammar deplorable, use of punctuation disgusting and basic structure a disgrace.
By now you should have learned the basics of spelling, grammar and writing. If you cannot remember any of those lessons, go back and review.
Proofread your work before posting and use a spell-checker. If you do not have a spell-checker built into your word processing program, an on-line version is available at spellcheck.net - use it!
'strangly' - The word is 'strangely'.
'latly' - Say what? Try using 'lately'.
'somthing' - There is an 'e' missing from this word. Can you figure out where?
'nose bleed' - No, not two words but one word.
'shruged' - There should be another 'g'.
'Owch' - Change the 'w' to a 'u'.
'ingediants' - The correct spelling is 'ingredients'.
'facevalted' - Use a hyphen in this word - 'face-vaulted'. And note correct spelling.
'alcohal' or 'alchol' - Wrong! It is 'alcohol'.
'simulataneously' - An extra 'a' has been added, can you see where?
'pregenat' - No such word. Do you mean 'pregnant'? And couldn't you look up a couple lines and use the 'same spelling, which was correct, as you previously used?
'quicckly' - This word has never had two 'c's in it.
'apolizged' - No, not even close. Look this word up.
'Relina' - Why? Why is this spelled wrong SEVEN times?
'sledhammer' - Strange, in all my years I've never heard of this tool. I have heard of a sledge-hammer.
'scoled' - No idea what word you were grasping for here.
'shes' - This is a contracted word and requires an apostrophe.
'thouroughly' - Do you mean 'thoroughly'?
'pefectly' - Try 'perfectly'. Can you see the difference?
'instinctly' - What? Could you mean 'instantly'?
'reponse' - No such word.
'instanely' - Can't find this word either.
'healthly' - Try again.
'espically' - Wow, what was this supposed to be?
'contined' - Does this have something to do with tins?
When writing speech (characters talking), each speaker is to be on a separate line. More than one speaker in the same paragraph is very hard to follow and is incorrect.
There are numerous instances of missing spaces, especially near conversation. This is an error repeated throughout your story.
'...and said,"WHAT are...' Between the comma and the quotation marks, a space is required.
'...Quatre said,"You've been...' Same spacing issue here.
If you cannot, or will not, proofread your work and post something readable then stop posting. This story is an insult to potential readers and the fandom as a whole. There are plenty of poorly written Gundam Wing stories already, don't add to the pile.
Fandom: Gundam Wing
Author: Really Bad Eggs
Location: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/405107/1/
Feedback given:
Where to begin with this story...
Your spelling is atrocious, grammar deplorable, use of punctuation disgusting and basic structure a disgrace.
By now you should have learned the basics of spelling, grammar and writing. If you cannot remember any of those lessons, go back and review.
Proofread your work before posting and use a spell-checker. If you do not have a spell-checker built into your word processing program, an on-line version is available at spellcheck.net - use it!
'strangly' - The word is 'strangely'.
'latly' - Say what? Try using 'lately'.
'somthing' - There is an 'e' missing from this word. Can you figure out where?
'nose bleed' - No, not two words but one word.
'shruged' - There should be another 'g'.
'Owch' - Change the 'w' to a 'u'.
'ingediants' - The correct spelling is 'ingredients'.
'facevalted' - Use a hyphen in this word - 'face-vaulted'. And note correct spelling.
'alcohal' or 'alchol' - Wrong! It is 'alcohol'.
'simulataneously' - An extra 'a' has been added, can you see where?
'pregenat' - No such word. Do you mean 'pregnant'? And couldn't you look up a couple lines and use the 'same spelling, which was correct, as you previously used?
'quicckly' - This word has never had two 'c's in it.
'apolizged' - No, not even close. Look this word up.
'Relina' - Why? Why is this spelled wrong SEVEN times?
'sledhammer' - Strange, in all my years I've never heard of this tool. I have heard of a sledge-hammer.
'scoled' - No idea what word you were grasping for here.
'shes' - This is a contracted word and requires an apostrophe.
'thouroughly' - Do you mean 'thoroughly'?
'pefectly' - Try 'perfectly'. Can you see the difference?
'instinctly' - What? Could you mean 'instantly'?
'reponse' - No such word.
'instanely' - Can't find this word either.
'healthly' - Try again.
'espically' - Wow, what was this supposed to be?
'contined' - Does this have something to do with tins?
When writing speech (characters talking), each speaker is to be on a separate line. More than one speaker in the same paragraph is very hard to follow and is incorrect.
There are numerous instances of missing spaces, especially near conversation. This is an error repeated throughout your story.
'...and said,"WHAT are...' Between the comma and the quotation marks, a space is required.
'...Quatre said,"You've been...' Same spacing issue here.
If you cannot, or will not, proofread your work and post something readable then stop posting. This story is an insult to potential readers and the fandom as a whole. There are plenty of poorly written Gundam Wing stories already, don't add to the pile.
# posted by hellsbit_ch @ 8:30 PM 
