Wednesday, January 19, 2005
A contender for 'the worst'
Title: QAF Season 1
Fandom: Queer As Folk (US)
Author: Bluelilly1928
Location: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2171185/1/
Feedback given:
To start with, character names should be spelled correctly - Brian NOT Bryan and Michael, NOT Michel.
And speaking of spelling, you should invest in a dictionary - NOW. Did you bother to run your work through a spell-checking program or proofread it? Spelling DOES count in a work of fiction.
commic - This word has one 'm' in it.
geting - The correct spelling is 'getting'. Note the double 't'.
opin - Try 'open'.
an nother - One word, not two - another.
rasied - Could you mean 'raised'?
whent - Maybe 'when'?
ther - Are you trying for the word 'their'?
wraper - Double 'p' in this word.
Poaitioned - What is this supposed to be?
screemed - There's an extra 'e' and a missing 'a' in this word. Can you figure out where?
littel - No such word, try again.
aparment - Can't find this word either.
Proper names should be capitalized. Michael is a proper name and deserves a capital 'M' just as 'Ben' deserves a capital 'B'.
Punctuation is missing or misused throughout the story. If you cannot figure out how to use quotation marks and commas, go to you local library and get a book on punctuation.
While you're at the library, get a couple books on spelling and grammar too.
If you cannot, or will not, take the time to ensure your work is as error free as possible, then do not post anything further. No one expects perfection, but to post something with so many errors makes a writer appear lazy, ignorant and completely uncaring of potential readers.
[Edit Jan 20-05] Address of story changed to http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2227747/1/ and all reviews removed.
[Edit - Jan 20-05] Author response
[Edit - Jan 20-05] More response from the author
[Edit - Jan 21-05] Story removed
Fandom: Queer As Folk (US)
Author: Bluelilly1928
Location: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2171185/1/
Feedback given:
To start with, character names should be spelled correctly - Brian NOT Bryan and Michael, NOT Michel.
And speaking of spelling, you should invest in a dictionary - NOW. Did you bother to run your work through a spell-checking program or proofread it? Spelling DOES count in a work of fiction.
commic - This word has one 'm' in it.
geting - The correct spelling is 'getting'. Note the double 't'.
opin - Try 'open'.
an nother - One word, not two - another.
rasied - Could you mean 'raised'?
whent - Maybe 'when'?
ther - Are you trying for the word 'their'?
wraper - Double 'p' in this word.
Poaitioned - What is this supposed to be?
screemed - There's an extra 'e' and a missing 'a' in this word. Can you figure out where?
littel - No such word, try again.
aparment - Can't find this word either.
Proper names should be capitalized. Michael is a proper name and deserves a capital 'M' just as 'Ben' deserves a capital 'B'.
Punctuation is missing or misused throughout the story. If you cannot figure out how to use quotation marks and commas, go to you local library and get a book on punctuation.
While you're at the library, get a couple books on spelling and grammar too.
If you cannot, or will not, take the time to ensure your work is as error free as possible, then do not post anything further. No one expects perfection, but to post something with so many errors makes a writer appear lazy, ignorant and completely uncaring of potential readers.
[Edit Jan 20-05] Address of story changed to http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2227747/1/ and all reviews removed.
[Edit - Jan 20-05] Author response
[Edit - Jan 20-05] More response from the author
[Edit - Jan 21-05] Story removed
# posted by hellsbit_ch @ 9:04 PM 
