Friday, January 14, 2005
Adding another to the growing pile...
Title: Wolf Girl
Fandom: Wolf's Rain
Author: Natsume
Location: http://www.mediaminer.org/fanfic/view_st.php/77849
Feedback given:
Please, do the reading public a huge favor - proofread your work and/or use a beta-reader before posting anything further.
Spelling, grammar and punctuation are just as important as the story premise. Ignoring these elements is insulting to readers and makes the writer appear to be an ignorant, uneducated idiot. Most writers would not care to be thought of in that manner.
After a period, at least one space (preferably two) is required before starting the next word. A period, or some other form of punctuation, is also required at the end of a sentence. When using a comma, a space is required between the comma itself and the next word.
Your spelling is atrocious. Most, if not all, of your spelling mistakes should have been caught if you had proofread your work and/or used a spell-check program. Nearly all word processing programs come with a spell-check feature. If yours does not have one, an on-line version is available at www.spellcheck.net.
drumes - Do you mean 'drums'?
breths - Try 'breaths', though 'breathing' would be a better word to use.
puicken - Maybe you mean 'quicken'?
ingerd - No idea what word you're trying to use.
reafused - There is no 'a' in 'refused'.
climed - Missing the letter 'b', but can you see where?
sholder - Missing a letter in this word. Do you know which letter is missing?
rightpast - This is two words - 'right' and 'past' - not one.
frightend - The word is 'frightened'.
Ther - No such word, try 'there'.
hav - Do you mean 'have'?
enouph - No, the correct spelling is 'enough'.
keped - What word is this supposed to be? Maybe 'kept'?
strate - The word is 'straight'.
plasterd - Letter missing, but can you tell which one and where it belongs?
aginsed - Correct spelling is 'against'.
raeched - Reverse the order of the 'a' and 'e'.
intrence - No such word. Do you mean 'entrance'?
whith - The word is 'with'. Notice there is only one 'h' in the word.
enouph - The 'p' should be a 'g'.
slinder - Do you mean 'slender'?
untill - One 'l' in this word.
cralled - The word is 'crawled'.
fierd - What word are you trying to use here?
evry - Missing a letter, but do you know what one?
Unless a word the name of a character, an abbreviation/acronym or for emphasis, capital letters should not be used midway through a sentence.
"considered Just to"
"puicken And her"
"reached The Bank she"
"determined To lose"
"head, And growled"
"of water When she"
"evry thing Went"
Take the time to ensure your work is as error-free as it can be before posting. If you can't, or won't, then stop posting. There are more than enough poorly written stories without you adding to the collection.
Fandom: Wolf's Rain
Author: Natsume
Location: http://www.mediaminer.org/fanfic/view_st.php/77849
Feedback given:
Please, do the reading public a huge favor - proofread your work and/or use a beta-reader before posting anything further.
Spelling, grammar and punctuation are just as important as the story premise. Ignoring these elements is insulting to readers and makes the writer appear to be an ignorant, uneducated idiot. Most writers would not care to be thought of in that manner.
After a period, at least one space (preferably two) is required before starting the next word. A period, or some other form of punctuation, is also required at the end of a sentence. When using a comma, a space is required between the comma itself and the next word.
Your spelling is atrocious. Most, if not all, of your spelling mistakes should have been caught if you had proofread your work and/or used a spell-check program. Nearly all word processing programs come with a spell-check feature. If yours does not have one, an on-line version is available at www.spellcheck.net.
drumes - Do you mean 'drums'?
breths - Try 'breaths', though 'breathing' would be a better word to use.
puicken - Maybe you mean 'quicken'?
ingerd - No idea what word you're trying to use.
reafused - There is no 'a' in 'refused'.
climed - Missing the letter 'b', but can you see where?
sholder - Missing a letter in this word. Do you know which letter is missing?
rightpast - This is two words - 'right' and 'past' - not one.
frightend - The word is 'frightened'.
Ther - No such word, try 'there'.
hav - Do you mean 'have'?
enouph - No, the correct spelling is 'enough'.
keped - What word is this supposed to be? Maybe 'kept'?
strate - The word is 'straight'.
plasterd - Letter missing, but can you tell which one and where it belongs?
aginsed - Correct spelling is 'against'.
raeched - Reverse the order of the 'a' and 'e'.
intrence - No such word. Do you mean 'entrance'?
whith - The word is 'with'. Notice there is only one 'h' in the word.
enouph - The 'p' should be a 'g'.
slinder - Do you mean 'slender'?
untill - One 'l' in this word.
cralled - The word is 'crawled'.
fierd - What word are you trying to use here?
evry - Missing a letter, but do you know what one?
Unless a word the name of a character, an abbreviation/acronym or for emphasis, capital letters should not be used midway through a sentence.
"considered Just to"
"puicken And her"
"reached The Bank she"
"determined To lose"
"head, And growled"
"of water When she"
"evry thing Went"
Take the time to ensure your work is as error-free as it can be before posting. If you can't, or won't, then stop posting. There are more than enough poorly written stories without you adding to the collection.
# posted by hellsbit_ch @ 10:14 AM 
